Saturday, May 3, 2014

Right idea... wrong execution...

AlphaAlpha by Jasinda Wilder
My rating: 3 of 5 stars

This is a tough review, and one I find that I have to write with much regret. I think maybe my hopes were too high for this book, I loved the synopsis, or maybe it was just the premise of the story, which was actually brilliant, it grabbed my attention, made me anticipate this book. It was also a Book of the Month on my group and I could hardly wait to start it.

The story idea was great, it started out pretty well with a little mystery and intrigue, but then it started to fall flat before it even got my complete interest. Kyrie and Layla sound like 16 year old high school girls instead of 26 year old women. They were not believable in their interactions. And frankly they drove me a bit crazy.

Roth sounds like a stalker to be quite frank. And I kept waiting for the other shoe to drop with him, which I think might have made for a much more interesting story.

I never thought I'd say this, but OMG toooo much sex!

All it was, was bouncing boobs, throbbing clits, pebbled nipples, and a bobbing penis. Page after page after page of over the top descriptive, and at times downright boring, sex.

I actually started skimming the book. Erotica I enjoy, but it's got to feel real between characters that I connect with, neither connection or realism were present for me.

Kyrie was always having these descriptive orgasms. I get it, the girl can cum, again and again and again... great, but cut back on the over the top descriptiveness. Again, there was just no connection.

All the years that Valentine Roth watched Kyrie, started sending the checks with cryptic little words on them, then sending Harris, his right hand man to "collect" Kyrie. Sorry, but it really was just plain creepy. But, it seemed he was willing to do anything to have this girl.

There is a big deal made of this *not* being a BDSM relationship, that he's not a Dominant, but they play around the edges of it. He "owned" her, she "belonged" to him. He spanked, tied up, threw her over his shoulder and carried her out of a restaurant, used a "sharp edged tone"... from a person that loves her BDSM reads, this was skirting on the edges of just that, and could have, would have, made it MUCH more interesting if that avenue had been explored instead of trying to desperately deny it or cover it up throughout the story.

Some areas did keep my interest at the time, but at the moment I really can't remember what they were. I finished the book less than 2 hours ago and already it's drifting away. Coming in at 429 pages was a bit much. This story could have been told in about 200 pages.

Oh and finally, what the hell kind of name is "Valentine". Really? Nothing else came to mind when naming the lead male character in this story?

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